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The very root of your writing whilst appearing agreeable originally, did not settle properly with me personally after some time. Someplace throughout the paragraphs you managed to make me a believer but just for a short while. I however have a problem with your leaps in assumptions and one would do nicely to help fill in all those gaps. In the event you actually can accomplish that, I will undoubtedly be fascinated.